February ’10 Writing Contest
Here’s an excerpt from a writing sample I found in my archives. It’s ridiculously complex. See if you edit out the legalese and make it plain, concise and easy to understand. Oh, and feel free to take liberties with the content. You’ll find that underneath all the legalese, the grammar doesn’t quite hold together. Either post your rewrite in the Comments section below, OR send your revision to me by email–jody@brunerbiz.com. I’ll post the best entries–good luck!
Laboratory Service Agreement
This agreement made as of the 19th day of August, 2009
Between Healthy Pathways Hospital (hereinafter referred to as Healthy Pathways) and Testing Services Laboratory (herein after referred to as TSL).
WHEREAS Healthy Pathways is desirous to retain and appoint TSL to perform the tests of X, Y, Z (which is more particularly described in attached Schedule A) on the “PROJECT” namely, YYY.
The PROJECT shall commence on September 1, 2009 and complete on December 31, 2009. Both parties agree that in event of delay of the PROJECT is necessary, the said delay shall not be exceeding sixty (60) calendar days.
Healthy Pathways shall be responsible for the measurements of vitamins. Both parties agree that TLS shall deliver all the samples for vitamin analysis to Healthy Pathways. Upon receipt of the said samples from TLS, Healthy Pathways shall forward the results to TLS within five (5) working days.
Healthy Pathways hereby covenants and agrees to pay TLS the service fees as follows:
(a) The setup fee for the assay of ZZZ, in the amount of FOUR THOUSAND FIVE HUNDRED DOLLARS ($4,500.00) within thirty (30) days after the execution of this agreement.
(b) Healthy Pathways shall make quarterly payment to TLS within thirty (30) calendar days upon receipt of invoice from TLS, for the measurement of ZZZ in the amount of NINETEEN DOLLARS ($19.00) per study subject after completing visit 1.
Quarterly payment shall be defined as December 1, 2009; March 1, 2010; June 1; 2010; September 1, 2010 and December 1, 2010. With respect to services performed for the period from December 2009 to December 2010, and in the event of delay of the PROJECT, TLS whall issue a reconciliation invoice to Healthy Pathways within seven (7) calendar days after completion of the PROJECT, and Healthy Pathways shall make payment to TLS within thirty (30) calendar days.